IELTS Writing: Governments sponsorship arts

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Here is an IELTS Writing Task 2 topic that I recently discussed with my students.

In many countries, the government sponsorship of the arts costs millions of taxpayers’ money. There are many more important things to spend money on. Do you agree?

Simple Answer:

There are some who claim that it is important to maintain the arts, and an equal number of people who are opposed to continued governments funding. I am in favor of this latter point for several reasons.

The strongest point is that money spent on the arts could have been used for considerable more vital purposes. While I admit that the arts are important to a country’s identity, it must also be given that a nation’s health and wellbeing should be paramount. The idea that elderly people are forced to wait for essential operations whilst the money required to increase available medical provision is spent on opera and ballet is plainly immoral.

In addition to health concerns, there are also more deserving social causes for the money that should be considered before the arts. Homelessness, unemployment, single mothers, and the crime rate – all of those issues deserve to be addressed before money is spent on what is essentially little more than entertainment.

A third factor is that some people have no interest in preserving or funding the arts, feeling that they have little practical value. If the arts are so much in need of sponsorship, then perhaps this is a reflection of their lack of popularity, in which case they should not be supported. The money could go to more popular events instead.

For each of these reasons, it can be concluded that there is little reason to continue funding the arts. Yet perhaps a compromise could be reached by which those keen to maintain the arts could raise a percentage of their own funds and the government could reduce its level of sponsorship.

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1 Comment IELTS Writing: Governments sponsorship arts

  1. JJ

    The strongest point is that money spent on the arts could have been used for considerable more vital purposes. While I admit that the arts are important to a country’s identity, it must also be given that a nation’s health and well being should be paramount. The idea that elderly people are forced to wait for essential operations whilst the money required to increase available medical provision is spent on opera and ballet is plainly immoral.

    1,Grammar and vocabulary = excellent 2,Task response and coherence = weak

    Paragraph 1 doesn’t justify that there are other important arenas than arts. The need of surgeries is convincing enough to spend money for health, however, it doesn’t mean other factors are important than arts. Though the paragraph shows that ‘the money required to increase available medical provision is spent on opera’, it doesn’t support the premise FULLY. Remember you need FULL support, development and extension to achieve a 9 band. Task response in this case is 7or 8.

    To get a higher band in Task and Coherence, candidates need to develop and justify it.

    See the point in the topic sentence is : more vital purposes ( I would say considerably more vital purpose). So candidates have to explain and justify ‘ more vital purpose’.

    Here is my take:
    The strongest point is that money spent on the arts could have been used for considerably more vital purpose. For example, as many elderly people are forced to wait for essential operations, the money is required to increase the medical facilities. In order to make the therapy or surgery available at anytime, government should release the fund. On the other hand, if government allocates its budget for arts, it would not be possible to provide the treatment for patients.Furthermore, though there may be some funds available after the art expenses, it will not be suffice. Therefore, it is very clear that the priority is health management.

    In this way, we can support the argument FULLY as 9 band descriptor stipulates. On top of this, coherence score will increase. Your coherence score is proportional to Task response even if you use topic sentence. Without a clear response, you can’t achieve clear progression which is the key for 7+ band. Please read the band descriptors from 7 bands. If one of them is missing, candidate will not achieve the higher score or fall back into the lower level.

    Good luck!

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